My piece is a new-talk show skit of a business meeting with John McCain and the current Chinese president Hu Jintao. I wanted to exaggerate John McCain's stand with corporations. I highlighted the Republican stereotype of sometimes forgeting the needs and wants of the lower class or foreign entity's to implement free market and capitalist policies. I also used a few tendencies that John McCain seemed to emphasize in his debate against Obama as well as some influence from the Saturday Night Live Debate.
I feel like my piece lags at some point, and the joke or exaggeration does not get across. What could I do to spice it up a bit? Does it catch your attention from the beginning?
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I like the idea, but as you try to make the argument you almost make it seem to serious. Whenever the Chinese president speaks at the beginning its stuff that is over the audiences head. The jokes about McCain only focusing on Obama and the end one on ignorance were really good
I like your joke about the ignorance of Obama, but I couldn't tell if the Chinese leader was angry or not, and I am just afraid that someone who doesn't know about the current situation that you were describing is going to be very confused. I think if I understood it more it would be funny, but you may want it to be able to fit a larger audience.
I would like to congradulate you on a very interesting and creative method of conveying a humorous argument. Your way of describing how McCain seems to handle all of his responses was good as well. I was a little confused as to what you main point was. If you could make that clearer, you would have something genuinely close to perfect.
Its clear that you know a lot about this topic, but I don't think a regular joe could really follow it. It was written in what I thought was a really natural dialogue, which is tough to do, so great job on that. To be perfectly honest it was a bit long which lets the audience attention drift. Other than that I thought it was really smart, and well informed humorous argument that was actually funny.
I thought your stuff was good. I think the jokes were well planned and i thought the seriousness of the Chinese leader only made it seem more funny. It also had good use of current facts and info to better show what your arugment was.
The only problem i saw with it is that some people might not understand the humor, so you may want to aim toward a larger audience.
I like how you choose to do a skit type humorous argument. I liked the layout, idea, and your facts. You should probably use different voices for each person talking to add more variety. Try and add more humorous remarks to keep peoples attention and laughing. I think adding Obama will add to it as well. Your idea is awesome just try and add a little bit more pizzaz!
This is a really good idea and very creative! I wasn't sure exactly what your argument was though and I think it was because of some of the dialogue. Obviously you really know a lot about your topic but unfortunately I don't so I was a little lost in some of the more serious parts of the talk. If you shorten each person's dialogue a bit and make it easier to understand for people not as informed, I think you will have a great piece!
The ida ia really good and I know it could be done very well. I think if you make it a little clearer what your main point is. I was also a little confused about what the Chinese leader meant by some of his comments. If you clear those things up, on the recorder it will be really good.
I really liked your ending about how it is better to Obama to win because he doesn't understand anything so we won't be affected and how when you were trying to get answers from McCain he kept switching it to speaking about Obama. However, I was a little bit confused following the conversation between McCain and the Chinese president.
I wasn't 100% sure on what the main point was about - but I did like how you included a couple of little jokes! And your Chinese accent was cute.
Mandy, I think your idea is very clever. But I also think that it would help to not make the beginning of the skit sound as serious as it does. People who do not follow politics that well may not find it as funny because they will not understand what the chinese president is talking about. Other than that I think that you have a great idea!
Fist off let me say, I love the accents, and it would be great to hear more of them. It was very informative. The "my opponent" part was great especially. This was humorous and informative at the same time, which I did not see much of. Great work.
Mandi- It's a great idea to do your argument like it was on the radio, because the way you read it was probably the most effective part. I liked the unbias-ness of the satire and how you made fun of both candidates. Great job.
I thought your argument was good! I'm not entirely sure that I would have gotten the point of it without you reading it thought. You're intonation and accents made it very good. It was a little bit hard to see the humor if you don't know much about the candidates and foreign policy. A little bit more upfront humor might open it up to a broader audience.
I thought you did a great job. The Obama joke was funny and your accent mad me laugh. Good stuff.
I think you hint at a couple of good point just were not effective at presenting them. I would prepare a lot better to make them effective. i did not think the presentation was humorous at all though. and i would rethink some of the points you made.
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